renlylittlerose: subaru, just temporary (Default)
renlylittlerose ([personal profile] renlylittlerose) wrote in [community profile] kurofai 2013-03-27 07:16 pm (UTC)

1. How in-character was this fic? 9
I think Fai and Kurogane were pretty much in-character. Kurogane wanting a new family with Fai and everyone else was bittersweet since Fai and him were closer in the past. I loved their pasts, you made me want to know more about Fai, Yuui and Kurogane before the whole thing with the crossbreeds.
I just wish there had been a bit more development for the Syaorans and Sakura.

2. How well did this fic fulfill the prompt? 10
I think it fulfilled it pretty well, plenty of dragons, but mechanical ones, so yes.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 8
So, I'm going to be incredibly unoriginal and say that Yuuko as a dragon was amazing (and she and Kurogane are a perfect match!). It was also really nice to see Freya and Elda and MKR characters, they're usually forgotten. Your world was interesting, the dragons' story too. I really liked them.
I noticed a few typos, particulary using "to" instead of "too" in more than one ocasion. But nothing that really distracted me from the story.
I loved the little details, like the lemon tarts, and Sorata's dragon being called Storm, the story behind Kurogane's (missing) arm (and how Fai felt guilty about it).
I agree with badluck_koi, the pacing in the middle seemed a bit rushed, and I think the stuff about their plans and creating the new dragons could've been a bit more developped. But then, their "attack" was really nice, and I loved Fai asking for tea like it was nothing at all.

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