I only just realized THIS MORNING that you had filled the prompt, HOW DID THIS HAPPEN - this is utterly gorgeous, and you're just working so, SO well with Fai's POV:
"He was embarrassed (...) that he had any wishes at all, that Ashura must now delay his holiday on this miserable excuse just because Fai wanted to see the little girl. He was a shameful person. // He also cried because Ashura loved him, and he loved Ashura, and he was weeping just because he was happy about that."
These lines (and any above) feel so very authentic... I feel that one of your greatest talents when it comes to writing has always been that you make me, as a reader, feel so strongly for the protagonist that I can barely peel my own and baby!Fai's feelings apart in this - this is heart-wrenching and -warming at the same time.
Also, I love to watch him grow up like this - in the manga, we seen him as an elementary student and then as an adult - I've always missed the years in between which mark the transition between these two stages. So much is happening as he is growing up. Also, while it hurts to see him work through issues of trust and self-worth as an adult, the concept grows much deeper the moment we get to know even more about his process of growing up.
...okay, enough of me blabbing - what I meant to say is that I'm LOVING this, and it's gorgeous, and, oh my god, FAREN, HOW ARE YOU SO AMAZING! *A* *A* *A*
Re: Flowers in Winter, Part 1 of ?
I only just realized THIS MORNING that you had filled the prompt, HOW DID THIS HAPPEN - this is utterly gorgeous, and you're just working so, SO well with Fai's POV:
"He was embarrassed (...) that he had any wishes at all, that Ashura must now delay his holiday on this miserable excuse just because Fai wanted to see the little girl. He was a shameful person. // He also cried because Ashura loved him, and he loved Ashura, and he was weeping just because he was happy about that."
These lines (and any above) feel so very authentic... I feel that one of your greatest talents when it comes to writing has always been that you make me, as a reader, feel so strongly for the protagonist that I can barely peel my own and baby!Fai's feelings apart in this - this is heart-wrenching and -warming at the same time.
Also, I love to watch him grow up like this - in the manga, we seen him as an elementary student and then as an adult - I've always missed the years in between which mark the transition between these two stages. So much is happening as he is growing up. Also, while it hurts to see him work through issues of trust and self-worth as an adult, the concept grows much deeper the moment we get to know even more about his process of growing up.
...okay, enough of me blabbing - what I meant to say is that I'm LOVING this, and it's gorgeous, and, oh my god, FAREN, HOW ARE YOU SO AMAZING! *A* *A* *A*
*showers you with love and adoration*