Technically, it fit the prompt well. Though I feel there is some debate on the species front since Kurogane is a persocom, not a living organism…I think.
How well written was the fic? 8
Currently the fic seems a bit unpolished and there are some grammar and spelling errors that need to be fixed, which should take no time at all. You managed to do a wonderful job portraying Kurogane’s feeling and making the reader see things from his perspective, which was very impressive.
How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 7
I would have liked it to be more your ideas and less Chobits, but it does seem to be working well so far. I enjoyed how you managed to make Kurogane’s reactions and feelings regarding his new “life” realistic. I can’t really give much more opinion on the story as it is currently an unfinished work. However I can say that I look forward to seeing where you go with the story.
I hope whatever you are going through will soon pass you by.
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Technically, it fit the prompt well. Though I feel there is some debate on the species front since Kurogane is a persocom, not a living organism…I think.
How well written was the fic? 8
Currently the fic seems a bit unpolished and there are some grammar and spelling errors that need to be fixed, which should take no time at all. You managed to do a wonderful job portraying Kurogane’s feeling and making the reader see things from his perspective, which was very impressive.
How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 7
I would have liked it to be more your ideas and less Chobits, but it does seem to be working well so far. I enjoyed how you managed to make Kurogane’s reactions and feelings regarding his new “life” realistic. I can’t really give much more opinion on the story as it is currently an unfinished work. However I can say that I look forward to seeing where you go with the story.
I hope whatever you are going through will soon pass you by.