[Team Dark] (the Eleventh Hour) Under Lock and Stone

[cloverfield]

Title: Under Lock and Stone
Prompt: The Eleventh Hour
Rating: M
Warnings: This fic contains strong violence, adult language, minor character death and dark themes. This fic may be triggering due to scenes that contain: claustrophobic implications, references to war, imprisonment, prisoners of war, execution, situational despair, and graphic injury. Please do not read this fic if you believe you may be triggered by any of the above; otherwise I am happy to discuss any themes before you read if you wish.

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[miyakodea]

1. How in-character was this fic? 8.5
I would say that they were both pretty well in-character. However, Fai’s presence was a lot more limited so it was harder to get an accurate feeling on how in-character he was. It would be interesting to have a part two where it is from Fai’s POV (hint hint).

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? 10
You chose a really clever way to fill the prompt and to represent Team Dark. I really enjoyed how you actually tied in the 11th hour with the food/collection rotations.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10
I loved this story. You managed to pack so much into it despite needing to nix the sight element. The story kept me engaged the entire time. The ending was amazing. I would be hard pressed to claim that a bright happy ending would match the rest of the writing. I feel like it would have instead been more of a way to placate people who want a more solid ending. While normally I have issues with the dreaded cliffhanger, the way you ended just fit with the rest of the story.

Thank you for this stunning work.

[cloverfield]

Wow, thank you so much!

You're right in that Fai was a little less developed than Kurogane - and I do think you're right in that if Fai had had some scenes in his POV, it would have been easier to show that. Still for the sake of suspense, I had to go with Kurogane-POV only, ahaha. Maybe I will write a "in the future" drabble or follow-up at some point one day!

I'm happy you liked the way I worked the theme in, and even happier that it was still engaging for you without the element of sight. It was definitely an interesting exercise, that's for sure! I'm really glad you thought the ending worked - it was the part I worried the most about, but I'm relieved people are finding it fitting.

Thank you so much for reading and voting - I really appreciate it!