[TEAM DARK] (Fantastic Beasts) Beacons

[thecicada]

Title: Beacons
Prompt: Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them
Rating: T
Warnings: Major character death/death as a major theme; Suggestions of animal abuse

More author's notes inside, but thank you to everyone who has made this event possible by organising, participating, or scoring! It's awesome to see the Olympics living on. Thank you to my coach the-smallest-kurapika for all your help! GOOD JOB GUYS let's read some fic.

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~the end.


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2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10)
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Comments

[flowerspeaks]

You had some very beautiful similes in this fic that I reread a few times over because they were so lovely (sobbing tremors of the candlelight/piece of fluorite rolled like a worried heart). Overall it is clear that you have a talent for creating a very visible setting with well crafted words. :)

1. How in-character was this fic?
ok so I really don't like this question because I feel like it is asking me to compare your writing to the manga- both of which are completely different in tone and style. But for the sake of scoring I think you captured Fai's essence perfectly; the subtle guilt that seems to be woven into his every being. I like your Kurogane, I think he is right for this world but in comparison to the manga I thought he was a bit more chatty? But also more vulnerable, being afraid of the dark, than his manga counter part (which i loved please don't get me wrong- in your fic he has no reason to be all hard edges and gruffness).
an 8.

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt?
I think you handled the prompt, Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them, very creatively. Is it Fai as he was in the presence of Kurogane, not alive and yet still in existence, or what he was before when he sucked the life from the mountain? Or maybe it was the will'o wisp that consumed all of Fai's being? Also you gave a very clear indication on where to find these beasts- in the swamp lands.
a solid 10

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall?
It was entertaining and not was I expected from a 'Beasts' fic, so wholly enjoyable! Although I have to say the very ending felt a little off, not because it was rushed but more like the tone or mood shifted suddenly. It just didn't feel quite right, sorry I cannot quite express it, but this is just my opinion!
an 8

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