[Team Future] (Vengeance is a dish best served cold) These skies are breaking

[reikah]

Title: These skies are breaking
Prompt: Vengeance is a dish best served cold
Rating: R
Warnings: Some drug (mis)use, abuse of power and authority, author has no idea what she's doing
Any author's notes Let's have another apocalypse now with 66% more robots because hahaha what is this story i dont even???

[Prologue] [Part One] [Part Two] [Part Three]

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Comments

[renlylittlerose]

Hmmm... Again, I'm not sure I should post this here? (Xia, I'm sorry I've quoted you so many times in my comments, I guess we just have similiar opinions? posted it in part 3, but this is the community site and it's where the rating thingy is, so I figured it made more sense to be here? Or maybe not? Sorry xD)

And I've reached the end of the Olympic fics. That was a long journey, and a very pleasent one! I'm amazed at everyone's creativity. They all made such wonderful stories! And you Reikah, organizing everything. Thanks for all the fun!

(review has spoilers)

1. How in-character was this fic? 10
It was pretty spot-on. I loved Kurogane, how he's such a good man even after all the bad stuff that happened. Fai and Yuui were so violent so, full of hatred, but that's to be expected in this kind of world. The crossovers were amazing, HOKUTO!! And Fuuma being an idiot, as usual. Oh, Yuuko too! She was awesome! I just loved what you did with her here.

2. How well did this fic fulfill the prompt? 9
It had a lot of revenge. At first I thought this would only be about Kurogane, but that the end there were conspiracies and all that stuff. Quite a full story!

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9
I really liked it. The universe you created and all that, you can always create such interesting stuff! There was a lot of pain (I remember your last Olympic fic had a lot of pain too ;_; why the pain?), a lot of grief, but at the end there was hope of something better. This kind of idea has been used, but you managed to bring something fresh to it, with the machines and the taminants. It only took me some time to understand all the stuff, specially regarding the machines and the virus. But it was really nice! :D Looking forward to the epilogue!

Oh dear, I'm gonna miss reading new fic all day! xD Everyone should just get a round of aplauses for their awesome work!

spoilers and fangirling abounds

[(Anonymous)]

Disclaimer: I can't guarantee this comment will make sense ;__; I'm fangirling here because THIS STORY WAS SO GOOD ASDFGHJKL Oh, and it's ridiculously long. Sorry about that.

The score's 10, 10 and 9, so you don't have to be bothered by the long-arse stuff (cough fangirling cough) I'll end up saying OTL :))

1. How in-character was this fic? 10

(I'm just going to be a little immature here. And a little shallow. Or a lot. =)) heads up... this might not be very relevant to the question /orz )

You have no idea how long my freak out lasted when I read Fai was flat as a board. (Oh god I can't even say it outright--I have to resort to bad metaphors like 'flat as a board' that hardly depicts how HUGE I've taken the situation. //OTL) It lasted all throughout the fic, and I might have irritated some people on Twitter because I kept shouting OHMYGOD THE UST IS NEVER GOING TO END and "But Fai--he's supposed to be fabulous and not afraid to shake it BUT NOW THERE'S NOTHING TO SHAKE." XD That's not even half of it. MAJOR freak out, like I said.

Haha. Honestly, I held on to the hope that he'd somehow magically grow some ... err... organs... later in the story. I often had to tell myself platonic love is so much cuter anyways... and purer. (Another one of my tweets: "At least Kuro-willgetnosex's intentions will be pure :(" /orz)

The great thing is, even when I was slightly (ohmygod biggest lie ever) bothered by it, it didn't stop me from enjoying the fic AT ALL. It bothered me, but I really did enjoy 'flat-as-a-board-Fai' (oh gosh, please just tolerate me here OTL I can't bring myself to type it out). Wow this was completely irrelevant, but I thought I'd share. =))

Anyways... On a more relevant note, Kurogane's irritation on being recognized through relations with his father rather than by his own accomplishments is soooo him.

Oh, and broken kid!Fai broke my heart :"(( I was so so so glad to see his flamboyant self after the prologue.

2. How well did this fic fulfill the prompt? 10

I realized the possibility of Fai being the culprit early on, but dismissed the thought because HOW COULD THAT LITTLE ADORABLE BROKEN KID DO SUCH A THING?? ;A; I was under the impression (or desperately hoped that) by "find someone who cares for you" (did I even quote it right OTL) referred to finding Kurogane in the future. So all the time before Yuui's appearance, I brushed off the thought that it could be Fai. Because how could he kill the parents of the kid who saved his life? D; Guess I underestimated the horrible situation of temnants.


3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9

(Cut off thoughts... errr... run on sentences, and uhh what is transitioning, and even possibly what is punctuation XD )

After the first few sentences in the story, I already knew I'd like it. I knew it had something great in store. Stories with narratives such as these (descriptive, eloquent, the like) couldn't possibly be horrible. Any author who'd take time to make it sound so beautiful to read would definitely have a great story and plot in mind.

I do wish there could have been more retaliation on Fei Wang Reed's side though. :O I had it in mind that the city was fairly strong enough with its defenses, and the people stubborn on their contempt for the virus and the temants that possibly carry them. ...err, then again, the ending did show a riot, so I guess it didn't fall /that/ easily... Gosh I don't know what I'm saying anymore. /OTL This is just me saying I'd have liked the story to be longer so I have more time with this story's Fai and Kurogane. XD

Simply put, words cannot describe how much I adore this story. There are no words for my feeeeelings right now (the closest one would be a keyboard smash, if that's even a word). Utopian/Dystopian universe with vengeful cyborgs asdfghjkl Beautiful :")

I do so want to see that epilogue. :")

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[(Anonymous)]

Will leave proper review, but for now:

1. How in-character was this fic? 10
2. How well did this fic fulfill the prompt? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9

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