(Team Sci Fi) [Soulmate] The Soulmate Project

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The Soulmate Project:

Prompt: Soulmate

Summary: When Fai’s brother is killed, and he is dragged into the resistance movement Yuui had been a part of, his life as a programmer at InfoTech is shattered. Now hidden away in a safe house with one companion, a surly ex-medical student named Kurogane, Fai has to decide to help his former company, run by the only family he has left, or these new rebels.

Rated: T

Warnings: Brief surgery scene:

Notes: I got the idea for this from reading an article about the Apple Watch, combined with the words 'artificial soulmates' from my roommate Rémy (username-goes-here most places) when I was beginning to plot. I also owe her much for beta-ing, and telling me when things didn't make sense (as happened a lot) and forever checking my spellling. Thank you darling! I'm VERY excited to be posting in this great community of fans, and also to be a part of this contest! Thank you!:

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[miyakodea]

How well did this fic fit the prompt? 8

I very much liked the idea of using technology to find a "soulmate". While your story did not really convey what I (personally) think of when the word soulmate comes up, I think in the context of a sci-fi prompt what you did was very creative. I can’t help think it is also a tad frightening as I can totally see it as something that could happen in the future, especially the way we are currently treating technology. The downside is that I felt the soulmate connection between Fai and Kurogane to be a bit lacking, it only really seemed to be mentioned at the end. Though I can’t help but think it may have been mentioned at the beginning when Yuui wanted to set Fai up with someone he knows that’s “really handsome” and whom he thinks Fai will love.

How well written was the fic? 8

There were a few grammar errors (understandable considering the length of your story) but they were not substantial enough to be truly bothersome or distract me from reading. You managed to cover a wide range of situations in a really short amount of time. Romance, drama, angst, action, you name it you had it! It was almost like a movie. While you put a lot in, it was not chaotic and everything flowed well.

How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 7

I think the story was very enjoyable. The concept you came up with was both clever and terrifying in its potential reality in our own future. The one real drawback for me was how you seemed to draw so much from cannon in certain areas. I am on the fence as to whether I should be impressed by how you were able to tie in cannon elements or a bit frustrated that you did not come up with something unique to put a bit more of your own touch on things.

For the record, I cannot decide if my favorite line of the story should be "The world is shit. What else do you need to know?" or "You’re a noodle, I don’t think you could even be in the same room as badass."