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(Team Fantasy) [Interspecies Romance] A Time Before Dusk)
Title: A Time Before Dusk
Prompt: [interspecies]
Rating: T for Teen
Warnings: canon-typical violence
Notes: While this is a Zelda/TRC crossover I've made sure (and been assured) that no prior Zelda knowledge is required to understand and enjoy this fic.
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1. How well did this fic fit the prompt? (1-10)
2. How well written was the fic? (1-10)
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
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I think... this fic is one's -or the one- that fits better the prompt. The crossover is just stunning and I could see all the differences between them, all the love between them but this fic, God, fit the prompt TWICE! With Kuro and Fay and with Clow and Yuuko too! Can I give yoi 11/10? No?
2. How well written was the fic? 10/10
Like every single fic of yours, this is perfect. Smooth, no mistakes at all, it captured me words by words. How can you do that?? ;_; <3
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 10/10
First of all, I like Zelda. Second of all, I like Twilight Princess. And in the end KuroFay is my OTP. These three things, combine together, make the ultimate fanfiction. I like every. single. word of it. I can't explain well how much I like it and love it; I can find sexy the way I imagine Kurogane in this AU yeah? Can I imagine how Fay licks-- okay I must to stop myself. Thank you for this piece of art. <3
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Team Fantasy with the prompt Interspecies with a Zelda crossover? I can't think of something more fitting lol
2. How well written was the fic? 10
It was really nice! It made me want to keep reading. Besides, I liked the fantasy and light vibe the story gives. The relationship between Kurogane and Fai felt very natural and easy and cute, so bonus points!
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 9.5
I really really loved it when Fai sneaked out in Kurogane's shadow. I felt the childish excitement as he was marveling at Kurogane's world, and I absolutely adore that, thank you, it's the kind of thing I love to see in fantasy stories. Yuuko and Clow as Fai's parents? YES! I loved that too! Plus, it was funny that Yuuko did the exact same thing, and it's something that I can totally see both of them doing lol
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I was wary when I saw that you decided to do a crossover with the Zelda universe but you did a stunning job. It fit perfectly! And on multiple fronts too when you include Clow and Yuuko. It was very clever!
How well written was the fic? 9.8
The story was written wonderfully. It flowed smoothly and progressed well. Your descriptions of the worlds were stunning and really captured their beauty. You also did well with showing how the feelings between Fai and Kurogane developed. On the down side, I felt the addition of throwing in Kyle and his attempted takeover to be a bit forced. It almost felt like it didn’t quite fit with the rest of the story. Though considering it is the Zelda universe, I suppose there has to be some crazy evil person set on destroying the peace and balance of the world.
How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 10
As a fan of Zelda, I feel I am a tad biased when I exclaim how awesome your story is. I’m willing to bet that may have been part of your plan to try and get high scores. ;) I was enthralled from start to finish. The worlds you chose to set the characters in, how your story unfolded, and your beautiful writing style made the story a wonderful piece of work.
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2) 9/10
3)9/10
Incredibly well written and well thought out. I loved the whole story from start to finished.
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This is a review from someone who has never played a Zela game in her life.
How well did this fic fit the prompt? - (10)
It fit very well! Very Fantasy, very Interspecies! Except... turns out it's only half interspecies. Somehow that must be cheating. |D
How well written was the fic? - (9)
The writing was very smooth and easy to read, with few hiccups. If there were mistakes, they weren't prominent enough to be distracting. Sometimes the cases that talked about history or culture were a little dense, but I have no doubt that's because they're probably filled with references to the actual Zelda games. It was easy enough for me to understand though, and made me wish I'd played the games myself. It had a very strong start, good climax, and somewhat satisfying end.
One of my only complaints is that the romantic scenes - like the almost kiss - seemed to come from nowhere and were more than a little awkwardly placed (though perhaps that was intentional). They were always moving a little faster than expected. It also would've been nice to hear a bit from Fai's perspective after he woke up again - a lot happened, and I had a hard time getting in his head after it or figuring out just what he was thinking/feeling.
How much did I enjoy this fic overall? (9)
This fic was a real ride! I got very invested in this universe I knew nothing about before, and from your descriptions, it really sounded beautiful. Everything was good, from the wonder to the sexy to the angst. Many thumbs up.
I'll admit, I wanted Kyle to see Fai in the end. To actually stare and acknowledge that he failed to kill him and die in his confusion. It would've been so satisfying after all that mocking he did.
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10
you emphasized the differences between them nicely!
2. How well written was the fic? (1-10)
9
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
9
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“Is that good or bad?” Fai asked and Kurogane could hear the hesitation in his voice.
Kurogane looked over at him again. “Good. It’s good.”
1. How well did this fic fit the prompt? 10/10
I don't think anyone can argue how well you filled this prompt. Not once, but twice, even, with Clow and Yuuko's love in the background. And while I know not a single thing about Zelda besides the 'ITS DANGEROUS TO GO ALONE TAKE THIS' meme, I enjoyed myself immensely. I loved how wide and wonderful and strange the two different worlds seemed; I loved how you explored Fai's world through Kurogane's eyes, and how Fai was strange and beautiful and so alien to everything Kurogane knew and even more wonderful because of that.
2. How well written was the fic? 9.5/10
His Blade tore into Kyle’s gut like a knife through warm butter. He twisted it inside of Kyle, making sure their eyes met. Making sure Kyle knew why Kurogane dug into him. Kyle died with a pathetic, choking gurgle and blood on his lips, crumbling like a ragdoll to the ground when Kurogane pulled his Blade away and Fai let his body go.
I AM SO IMMENSELY SATISFIED THAT RONDART DIED HORRIBLY DO YOU EVEN KNOW. *cough* I mean, I thought the action scenes were well-paced and exciting, but where you really shone was the world-building and the way Kurogane and Fai react to each other and the people they love. I understood everything, even as a non-Zelda-aware reader, but sometimes the information given was dizzying, and I liked that this was a world so different from everything I'd seen before. Also, it's so wonderful to see the characters interacting with each other like Kurogane and his father, and Clow with his children. I want to see more of Yuuko, ugh, she's my fave and having her as Fai's mother was just brilliant.
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 10/10
SUCK IT RONDART, SUUUUCCKKKKK ITTTTTTTTT!! *cough* Okay, I loved this. I loved all of it, and I wanna see more if you ever do feel like coming back to it. I'm really glad you entered the event this year, and I'm so proud of you for participating! This was lovely, you are lovely, and I hope you come and join us again next year!
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1. How well did this fic fit the prompt? 9/10
I really liked the setting! It works well for high fantasy, so I think you chose your crossover well, and you utilised all the ~cultural exchange~ and ~slow unfamiliarity blossoming into trust~ tropes that I like to see in an interspecies narrative.
2. How well written was the fic? 7/10
Definitely super nicely constructed - again, I really felt immersed and welcomed in the universe because of the fantastic detail and clever explanations you used. You conveyed a lot of background information without infodumping excessively, which takes skill! The prose itself was also very fluid and effective.
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 8/10
.................it kind of made me feel like I should try and figure out what Zelda is, ngl.
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2. How well written was the fic? 9
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 9
I have to commend you for how well you've written this crossover, because as someone who knows zilch about Legend of Zelda, at no point did this fic feel alienating or incomprehensible to me. The setting was immersive and your attention to detail never derailed into heavy infodumping. The utilisation of both POVs emphasised the interspecies prompt from both ends, which was fantastic.
When the plot deviated from the focus on the romance and the exploring of each other's worlds, I felt it lost its stride a little. The whole shenanigans with Kyle seemed a bit tacked on tbh; there was no indication earlier on in the fic that things would take such a drastic turn. It was wrapped up nicely and there was a good tense atmosphere in all the encounters with Kyle. It just needed some foreshadowing, for me.
There were a lot of little things I loved too, like how Kurogane described sunrises to Fai (your descriptive prose there is just lovely) and the fact that Kurogane's parents are alive and teasing him about settling down. Thank you for writing, and I hope my vote still counts!