[Team Light] (Honor Among Thieves) Sky Light

[pokechan]

Title: Sky Light
Prompt: Honor Among Thieves
Rating: Teen and up
Warnings: Kidnapping, canon-typical violence, King Trash Face
I've been wanting to do a sci-fi/fantasy combo and I think I pulled it off pretty well.

"Sky Light" on AO3


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http://unfriendlyreminders.tumblr.com/

[(Anonymous)]

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[notpotable]

1. How in-character was this fic?

10!

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt?

10!

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall?

10! So happy to see Mei-ling!! Also thrilled that you didn't include anything triggery to me despite fsking seishirou being involved. Thanks for making him just a bad guy and not explicating any of his worst sort of shit. Loved the backup laser sword! The world building and Celestial Lights premise was delightful!

[hollyjollypaca]

1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10) 9
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10) 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10) 9

It seemed kinda rushed so some of the interactions sorta fell because of the pacing. But it's what can happen when you work with a short story. It was very much in tune with the prompt though and didn't stray far from it at all. Pretty much touched on it head on actually.

The only real complaint is that during the scene with Fai using magic to keep the ship supplied with air, I had to back track and reread to see where that even started. Cause I wasn't able to recognize that he had started to do that in the first place until Kurogane called for the hull's repair while Fai gave them time. Got me very confused.

[tsubasafan]

1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10) 10
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10) 8 handled it fairly well, though I wish it had been more detailed. Like us seeing them in action and not just spoken about.
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10) 8.5

I really, really enjoy this concept, but I was a little confused and this felt kind of rushed. You establish an interesting world that seemed fairly dark. I wasn't sure if the universe was suffering from a heat death scenario or was their an encroaching darkness? I'm curious about the blight. Did it take a human form or possess people? I feel like kurogane found everyone a little too quickly and we didn't get much of a time frame or details ( I don't remember the ship having a shield on it mentioned before the ending)

This fic could have easily become a monster in size. Especially when you were going for Treasure Planet/Atlantis vibes, which I adore. I got the tp from the solar ships and pirates and Atlantis from the idea of deities living and actively protecting their people, but it could've been delved into so much deeper and would LOVE to see this idea extended. Ships sailing on solar winds, wild planets covered in ruins, a primitive looking, but superior technological race all while trying to restore the sun to keep life going and the moon to keep things in balance.

[(Anonymous)]

1. How in-character was this fic? 10
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? 9
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10

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[(Anonymous)]

1. 8
2. 8
3. 8

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[xchan]

I really love the setting! I'd like if it were explained a little more, but you gave enough for it to work and have me thinking :D I love that you included those CCS bits, like Meiling, Kero and Yue. If I have to nitpick, I would say that even if I liked the detail of the laser sword, it felt a little like it came out of nowhere.

1. How in-character was this fic? 9
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10

[(Anonymous)]

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1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10) 9.5
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10) 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10) 9.5

Some parts seemed a bit choppy or rushed (or maybe because Seishirou was there, it was probably because of him). But oh gosh, the world building! The premise of Light and Dark was taken so differently yet handled oh so well!!

[(Anonymous)]

1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10) 10
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10)10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)10
http://archiveofourown.org/users/KittenIntheSkyy

[miyakodea]

1. How in-character was this fic? 9.5
You did a wonderful job keeping everyone in character but in some areas the characters (mainly the side characters) seemed to be lacking a bit of depth.

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? 9
The story filled the prompt well but it would have been nice if there was more detail on the Team Light aspect of the story. Everything was there, it just seemed like more back-story on your world would have helped.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9
I loved the story and the world you created. However, the story itself seemed clipped, a bit rushed, and missing some details. I’m sure the deadline and the story length contributed the shortcomings. It is difficult to build worlds perfectly in a short story, but as I mentioned above more back-story on your world would really help to make the fic even better. In all honesty, the whole fic almost felt like a detailed prologue/first chapter to an epic novel. I would genuinely love to read more about this world and would welcome any additional writings (that's a hint, take it).

Thank you for the story!

[farenmaddox]

We're still a little sparse on votes, so I hope it is okay with all the writers to have a moderator jumping in to vote as well!

1. How in-character was this fic? 10
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10

I made it about 3 paragraphs in, realized this was a story about SPACE PIRATES, and promptly lost my shit. This hit every note for me, no joke. I love the fusion of sci-fi and fantasy more than I can say, and I love stories about pirates, especially SPACE PIRATES. (I'm sorry, there is no way for me to write that without capslock.) I loved Sakura and Fai so much in this story, and I thought the development of the relationship between Kurogane and Fai was really well-paced and natural. That bit where Fai just leans back on him and opens up the possibility felt so effortless and yet so important.

For a short story, this was absolutely fantastic. But I feel no qualms about encouraging you to make it into a longer story with more world-building, more futuristic magic, and the epic space adventures of SPACE PIRATES.

[haezofdaust]

1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10)
9

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10)
9

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
8

This was an enjoyable ride! Albeit it sort of had the feeling it was skimming the surface of something… more. It felt like this was the start of a could-be wild, wild ride!