[Team Light] (Fools Rush In) Kaleidoscopes

[mindlessadri]

Title: Kaleidoscopes

Prompt: Fools rush in where angels fear to tread

Rating: T+

Warnings: Injury; not shown in a graphic capacity

I went with a very literal interpretation with the prompt. The story focuses around making rash decisions and their outcomes.

 

(Please read Kaleidoscopes here)

~the end.

 

 

 

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Comments

[tsubasafan]

AHHHHHHHHH!
1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10) 9.5 I love growing up fics with these two, how they always come together in a million ways in a million lifetimes through fics. This is no different.
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10) 9.5 the angst and the bittersweet ending just killed me.
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10) 10.
ammit I just finished this and I'm still on the verge of tears. It was beautiful and heartfelt and while it took me a few tries to get into the first chapter, once I did I didn't stop.

This has the feel of being set in the 70s or so, just from the saccharine/melancholy feel it has. ( and possibly because of the trains and movies like Super 8)

[hollyjollypaca]

1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10)
10; Most DEFINITELY in character. Only way it could get closer is if you were CLAMP....you aren't are you? XD

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10)
9; Hmmmm it doesn't seem like it does at first but once you get towards the end, it makes sense.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
10; I very much enjoyed seeing these two grow up, seeing how Yuui's death meant for Fai's situation, seeing just what they'd end up doing despite the problems they had. <3

[miyakodea]

1. How in-character was this fic? 10
You did a really good job if keeping them in character throughout the time span of the story. I also very much appreciated how realistic you made them.

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? 9.5
I really enjoyed how you chose to fill the prompt. It was such a unique spin to use a kaleidoscope to show how their relationship (and relationships in general) change and evolve over time. It was all the more beautiful because Kurogane and Fai are part of the CLAMP universe(s) where the “different lives but the same souls” concept is rampant. It was a clever way to pull in the Team Light aspect too.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9.5
As mentioned above, I give you serious points for the kaleidoscope concept. It is hard to believe no one thought (or at least wrote) about it before as it fits CLAMP so beautifully. The story was a bit choppy at times, but the time skips were handled very well. I really loved the story and how you put them in a realistic “modern” setting to tell their story.

Thank you so much for writing and sharing!

[sugoi_auriga]

1. How in-character was this fic? (8)
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (8)
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (8)

it was pretty angsty.

[flowerspeaks]

I loved this fic- I really did.

How in-character was this fic?
I really loved how you captured Fai's reasoning for doing the things that he do. Like unless you really pay attention to the things he is actually saying then all of actions will seem completely random and off the wall. I love the internal struggle Kurogane had with what he was saying/emoting and what he was truly feeling. I loved how Yuui's death is what restricts Fai and all the options he had available; that Yuui's death is what gives the power to their parents to really hold Fai to their desires. I loved how you completely humanized Kurogane and clearly showed that is angry outburst are just a negative way he handles strong emotion since his mothers death.
Also how you made Kurogane an adorable, bashful youth.
10

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt?
I think you handle the prompt quite well- these boys knew better but did a lot of things that were quite risky(risque). Like when they broke into the old gym to get the ball down- they whole time I was like 'omg! they are gonna get arrested!'
I thought the way you handled the theme of light was strongest in the first chapter and kinda faded away until the very end where it wrapped up the story beautifully.
9

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall?
I loved it. I enjoyed the dialogue between characters, the growth and development of characters and their relationship. How you really captured different family dynamics and their reactions to loss. You just really humanized these characters and their lives for us so beautifully- so I just want to thank you for contributing to this years olympics!
10

I would love it if you ever continued or elaborated more on this fic. I still have so many questions and desires to know what will happen to them in this world you created. :)

[(Anonymous)]

1. How in-character was this fic? - 9
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? - 9
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? - 9

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[(Anonymous)]

1. How in-character was this fic? 10
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? 9
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10

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I think this fic is going to keep me up tonight gosh I loved it.

[haezofdaust]

1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10)
10

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10)
9

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
10

Oh. This fic hits like a sledgehammer. It's so honest, real, and human, and it comes with such powerful moments. Loved the themes that ran throughout and the heavy, poignant mood of it all. It's hauntingly, beautifully written and I'm not ready to get off this wild train ride of a fic yet.