[Team Light] (20,000 Leagues Under the Sea) The King and the Albatross

[arisprite]

 Title: The King and the Albatross
Prompt: 20,000 Leagues Under the Sea
Rating: Teen and up
Warnings: Canon-typical violence, some unsettling imagery, and description of drowning, apparent character death.


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[hollyjollypaca]

1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10) 10
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10) 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10) 9

I think this round will bring a lot of bias from me cause I have a huge thing for OTP's out at sea (and saving each other from watery graves, I'm so evil). But I don't think you could get any better with staying in character! It was read like you just plucked them from the manga. The only thing I can point out is that Fai and Kuro-sailor's relationship didn't really seem to grow from point A to point B? Maybe it's just me reading at dawn but it felt like there was not much bonding to have Kurogane kiss Fai at the end.

[notpotable]

1. How in-character was this fic?

8 - I'm not sure what to think of the trend of excessively antagonistic Touya this Olympics, so that was a bit surreal to read. Your Kurogane was a joy to read though, speaking more through actions than anything else!

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt?

9 - Not much time spent *under* the sea, I'm afraid! (And I also didn't see much of a "Team Light" theme to it, alas.)

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall?

10! - Aubrey-Maturin fan, ahoy! And I'm always eager for fic dealing with Kurogane having *actually lost his arm* and the difficulties that would bring. And what more apt setting than the Age of Sail and its significant number of people with career-induced loss of limb? I liked the steam punk elements a lot, too!

[(Anonymous)]

1. 9
2. 8
3. 9

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[miyakodea]

1. How in-character was this fic? 9.5
While he was not the focus of the story, I felt that Touya was pretty aggressive (though perhaps mostly justified in the world and context). Everyone else seemed incredibly in-character. I loved how much Kurogane said without actually using words.

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? 8
There was a lot of sea related stuff going on but I felt like the 20,000 leagues under was missing. I would have liked the under the sea aspect of the prompt to be stressed more. I also felt that the Team Light aspect was missing from the story.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9
I felt that there was something missing but I can't figure out what it is. The ending also seemed a bit off with the context of the rest of the story but everything else flowed really well. I loved the story anyway. I’m always a sucker for steampunk and pirates so it was super cool to read a story with them combined.

Thank you so much for writing this fic!

[sugoi_auriga]

1. How in-character was this fic? (7)
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (9)
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (8)

i like that tomoyo and sakura were the captains.

[(Anonymous)]

1. How in-character was this fic? 10
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? 9
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10

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(my full comment is on AO3)

[flowerspeaks]

Wow this was well written and I could totally feel your passion for boats and the nautical life shine through out this whole fic.

1. How in-character was this fic?
I really felt that you captured the essence and driving motives in Fai perfectly. Kurogane is also captured perfectly except I felt like he lacked motives. I also felt that their relationship, at the very end tail end of the fic, was rushed. Their relationship before that developed wonderfully though.
8

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt?
I think you handle the prompt originally and creatively. I thoroughly enjoyed what you put together for the prompt but I didn't see much/any 'team light' aspect to it, which, was a bummer.
6

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall?
Oh yes I very much enjoyed your fic, it had great action moments and beautifully written visuals as well. A very entertaining story from start to end.
10

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!) 9/10
2) 10/10
3) 9/10

[xchan]

1. How in-character was this fic? 9
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9

I loved reading this fic, even if my only aproach to naval stories has been Pirates of the caribbean xD Kurogane and Fai were spot-on and I loved that you included XiaoSaku <3
Only two things: the ending felt a bit rushed with the Sea King leaving too easily, and Touya. He usually is a pain in the ass but leading a mob doesn't seem like him.

[haezofdaust]

1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10)
9

2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10)
9

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
10

This was a really really fun read! This fic brings with it all the excitement of an epic sea adventure and all the pirate feels! Perhaps the sails somewhat lost a bit of their wind at the tail end of the fic, but aayyeeeeeee the journey was still remarkably magnificent!