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cloverfield ([personal profile] cloverfield) wrote in [community profile] kurofai2014-04-21 08:19 pm

[Team Comedy] (Rule 63) Be My Dangerous Girl

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Title: Be My Dangerous Girl
Prompt: Rule 63
Rating: M, for swearing and violence and sassmouth.
Warnings: Lots of instances of the word 'fuck', and quite a bit of violence in the middle; if you're triggered easily, please tread carefully.
Author's notes: GENDERSWAP IS SO FUN YOU GUYS, OMG. I HOPE YOU HAVE AS MUCH FUN READING THIS AS I DID WRITING IT. I've posted it over at my dw for convenience, but please vote here for the sake of the mods!

It all started -as the workweek usually does- on a Monday morning.

Thank you for reading! How did I do?
Please score my fic according to these guidelines:
1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10)
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? (1-10)
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)

Remember that you must provide some form of identification (a link to a blog or profile on another site will suffice) for your vote to be counted!
renlylittlerose: subaru, just temporary (Default)

[personal profile] renlylittlerose 2014-04-22 04:23 pm (UTC)(link)
When I got to this specially good passage "Dear Santa, if I promise to be a very good girl and play nice with the corporate dipshits who buy my coffee and not kick anyone in the gonads who really doesn’t deserve it, may I please have that in my stocking this Christmas?" I was completely won over.
I have never seen such a perfect fem!Fai and fem!Kurogane. Honestly, they were great, they felt like authentic women, but still familiar, and omg the sexual tension!! This was perfect. I couldn't stop giggling the whole time I was reading this. Your writing was super funny and settled the mood very nicely. I loved Fai's inner monologues when she was going crazy at sexy-badass-Kuro-lady, I loved sexy-badass-Kuro-lady with her red dress and that cute blush and Tomoyo being a little devil and SASSY HOKUTO were like the cherry on top of the cake! Goddamit this was a very good start for this olympics.

1. How in-character was this fic? 10
Fai and Kurogane felt very authentic, Fai was snarky, sweet but still had that insecurity Fai always has. Kurogane was arrogant (by the end of the fighting it was like she was showing off, how badass can she be?), grumpy, but tender and adorably shy. And I loved male Hokuto and male Tomoyo.
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10
You made me like the genderbent characters and I got inside the story, even though genderbending was never really my cup of tea. Usually when I read this kind of fics (for whatever fandom) I always feel like I'm watching new characters, who have the name of the real characters, but feel foreign, or OOC. But I didn't feel this way when I read this fic at all. It was Fai and Kurogane, but as if they had been born women and had always been and I had always read them as such. So I think it was very well handled. As for the comedy part, totally great too!
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10
First fic I read and I'm giving it all 10's. That just shows how much I liked it. :D

(Anonymous) 2014-04-22 07:09 pm (UTC)(link)
Lovely. Positively entertaining and engaging, particularly the loaded diction and inward gushing, heh.

1. How in-character was this fic? 7.5
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 9
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9.5

Thank you!

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HOLY CRAP

(Anonymous) 2014-04-23 06:20 am (UTC)(link)
1. How in-character was this fic? 10!
I absolutely love how you transposed Kurogane and Fai's personalities into this AU and still allowed them to come into their own as new characters. The dialogue was fantastic and natural, and your writing style really helped develop their personalities -- Fai's especially! -- and made the entire story that much more fun to read.

2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10!
Very well. Like to infinity and beyond well.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10!
A helluva lot. It was a fantastic ride from start to end, and I was hooked and had sweet dreams of lesbians going out of dates and riding motorcycles. This is the good life.

Thank you so much for writing this!

[Oh yeah, this is farfigneutroblaster.tumblr.com.]

(thanks for the) lovable lesbian ladies lustily longing (for each other)

[personal profile] pilatesiguana 2014-04-24 04:21 am (UTC)(link)
“And why, exactly, would I need to knock coming out of the bathroom?”
1. How in-character was this fic? 8
Their interactions are just great, I love their "OMG she's super hawt i can't talk to her" type awkwardness but also how well you showed that they're seriously perfect for each other in a comedic piece. I think I just have Fai and angst way too intertwined in my head. It's probably just me but it kinda doesn't compute when life isn't actively trying to get him. I would have liked some dark humor to round out their characterization, but I'm guessing that it might have seemed like you were trying to steal the other team's theme. (no cheating here, I know) But they're exactly what I would imagine them to be in a wonderful genderswapped angst-less world!

2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10
I enjoyed how you went above and beyond the call of duty in genderswapping everyone! :D Hokuto & Tomoyo are both great sassy gay friends and Fai & Kuro are the most adorable/dorky/hot lesbians ever. I think you worked the genderswapping part really well, you made Fai and Kurogane feminine in both subtle and significantly less subtle ways, without overdoing it.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9
" Was it really appropriate to go propositioning the barely-legal boytoy for a booty call in front of his bodyguard? ...aaand now I’m thinking in alliterative terms. Fuckin’ A. "
I loved the at times snarky at times adorkable but always hilarious tone of this piece and Kurogane & Fai's super cute relationship building! This is an awesome story and I'll definitely be coming back to it whenever I need a some fluff and comedy in my life. Thanks for the lovely work! :D
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[personal profile] phebe 2014-04-24 10:31 am (UTC)(link)
I really loved how you transposed Kurogane personality and Fay inner monologue :) loved male!Hokuto and male!Tomoyo too!

1. How in-character was this fic? 7.5
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 9
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9
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[personal profile] carabarks 2014-04-25 08:39 am (UTC)(link)
Sorry if this comment comes out curt. Typing on mobile is hard D;

1. How in-character was this fic? 9
I couldn't help but notice the lack of banter and teasing nicknames here from Fai, but hell, I wouldn't tease Kurogane either; staring at her wondeful thighs seems to be a better way to kill time.

2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10
HOKUTO'S SASS OHMYGOD. Tomoyo and nail polish. I wish I got to see how a PMSing Kimihiro dealt with Doumeki. RULE 69 IS THE BEST.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9
Taking down bad guys with spoons after making out in the middle of gunfire. ACE.
Edited 2014-04-25 08:40 (UTC)
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[personal profile] kittenkin 2014-04-26 12:29 pm (UTC)(link)
1. How in-character was this fic? (10)

When I got to Hokuto I decided, "characterization is a ten no matter what happens in the rest of the fic". I recognized Tomoyo just from a half-sentence about big dewy eyes hiding mischief in the sparkle. Characters who don't even visibly appear in the story are recognizable. And Kurogane and Fai are so perfectly THEM. Kurogane is hyper-protective and quick with her game face and roughly affectionate. Fai is scarred and warm of heart and good at facades. And beyond a few tidbits thrown out there quite smoothly you worked it all in so naturally. Didn't spell it out for the audience; just let them "get it" on their own.

Also excuse me. Paramedic and bodyguard and PEDIATRIC NURSE to showcase how their nurturing personalities translate into Earth careers. My heart. I can't.

2. How well did this fic handle the trope? (10)

You rule 63'd ALL the EVERYTHING. I'm deducting 0.01 points out of unreasonable disappointment that you didn't rule 63 a tuxedo mocha into a wedding gown mocha, but that still rounds up to a perfect 10.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (10)

I had to stop and wheeze after reading Hokuto's note. Oh my God, Kurogane and Fai's FACES. I can see them so clearly in my mind and I just...I can't. I also love how real Fai's constant stream of thought-jumbles are, as well as the conflicting emotions. People are not definable or describable with single concepts, and neither should characters be. The details that bring such reality to the story delight my soul.

... *CRYING at the thought of Kurogane in Fai's yoga pants*

KUROPARENTS. MARRY ME AGAIN. (Apologies for increasing incoherency; it's been a long week of 12-hour work days, it's nearly 5:00am and I have yet to go to bed.) I don't know whether I want to draw Kurogane with her hair up in a bun more or an actual stork of the feather-and-beak kind wearing pumps. *giggle*

Oops. The whole kidnapping was so exciting that I forgot to comment on it as I read. Well...there's your feedback; it was gripping! XD I love that as much as it's startling for Fai to realize that she trusts Kurogane even in this WTF-is-my-life situation, I'm more impressed and in love with the fact that Kurogane recognized that she could trust Fai.

One hundred points to Kidnappers for getting Tomoyo the fuck out of the way so Kurogane and Fai could finally kiss. Ten points each to Hokuto and Tomoyo for excellent use of social media. All the points for all eternity to Kurogane for making Fai remember what it's like to be valuable and precious and good.
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[personal profile] tsubasafan 2014-05-01 06:03 am (UTC)(link)
1. How in-character was this fic? 8 Kurogane and Fai I felt were pretty spot on, especially Kurogane. Not too sure about Hokuto, but then it's been a very long time since I've read Tokoyo Babylon. Loved all the gushing and badassery

2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10. Ladies everywhere. Kicking ass and taking names.

3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9

[personal profile] zerofangirl 2014-05-09 02:32 pm (UTC)(link)
1. How in-character was this fic? 10
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10

This was my favorite of them all! It's just so perfect. :D Thank you really much for writing!

*too shy to comment more*

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[personal profile] bottan 2014-05-10 07:35 pm (UTC)(link)
THIS FIC IS JUST SO GOOD, BB

9 - 10 - 10

Also have my heart, I HAD SO MUCH FUN WITH THIS ♥
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[personal profile] ereshkigali 2014-05-12 07:29 pm (UTC)(link)
RETURNING WITH A QUICK VOTE!!

1. How in-character was this fic? 7
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 7.5
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10
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[personal profile] mindlessadri 2014-05-13 05:27 am (UTC)(link)
Sorry I would leave a huge long comment but I already did in your journal so I'm just going to vote here. :3

1. How in-character was this fic? 8
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 8.5
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[personal profile] farenmaddox 2014-05-14 02:25 am (UTC)(link)
*is a busy person, flings scores at everyone and runs*

1. How in-character was this fic? 8
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10

[identity profile] carmenwoods.livejournal.com 2014-05-15 09:42 pm (UTC)(link)
This was fantastic, and I am with Fai 100%: badass Kurogane is sexy as hell.

1. How in-character was this fic? 10
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10

[identity profile] carmenwoods.livejournal.com 2014-05-15 09:47 pm (UTC)(link)
I think Kurogane's terrifyingly awesome dadmom was my favorite part. No wait, it was Tomoyo's momdad. Wait, no, my favorite was all the imagery as Fai admired Kurogane. Very difficult to pick.
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[personal profile] princehircine 2014-05-16 12:47 pm (UTC)(link)
1. How in-character was this fic? 7
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 9
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 9

I had a lot of fun reading this! I thought Kurogane's characterisation was really good. I enjoyed seeing everyone genderswapped! Also, bonus points for eye jokes~

(Anonymous) 2014-05-17 06:28 pm (UTC)(link)
1. How in-character was this fic? 10
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10

This was just absolutely wonderful and I loved it.

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[personal profile] reikah 2014-05-18 01:49 am (UTC)(link)
Feedback tomorrow, I just wanted to get my vote in lightning-fast before the deadline!

8.5-10-10!

(I REALLY WANT MORE ADVENTURES OF KURO-AWESOME AND HER FAI)
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[personal profile] eijentu 2014-05-18 02:27 am (UTC)(link)
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaah! oh my god chloe this was fabulous, as always! i adore these ladies in love and i really love how you switched *everyone* because i kind of have a total weakness for that??? <.< TOMOYO WAS WONDERFUL AND HOKUTO WAS A TOUR DE FORCE and oh my god i love the warmth and sensuality that just inhabits your writing. there are far too many lovely phrases to pick out, but i loved this one especially:

Kurogane blinked, just once, her smile falling away- and then it was back and a thousand times dirtier, hot and triumphant and lighting her eyes up like the dawning sun.

FAI NEVER HAD A CHANCE CHLOE JUST SAYIN <.<

eeeeeeeeeeeeeee and i'm so happy i can vote because it is absolutely 10-10-10 for your lovely happy ladies in love! <333
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[personal profile] sotongsotong 2014-05-19 01:55 am (UTC)(link)
1. How in-character was this fic? 10
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10
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[personal profile] miyakodea 2014-05-19 02:00 am (UTC)(link)
Hopefully I met the deadline (I am unsure what time zone we needed to follow). I am relatively new to the fandom and was sad I missed last year's competition when I heard about it. I got super sick this year so I don't really feel up to writing in depth reviews right now but I will come back and do that later. For now I will just give my scores.

1. How in-character was this fic? 10
2. How well did this fic handle the trope? 10
3. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? 10
Edited 2014-05-19 02:01 (UTC)